Sunday, March 18, 2012

The Pool

I jump in
I try to move fast
But I'm overcome with fear and fatigue

My body is aching
I try to rest
But I know I cannot

They say, "COME ON!"
I push will all my strength
I am finally on the other end

I
              go
                                       under........................................

8 comments:

  1. Impressive work! I salute you

    ------V

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  2. I seriously love the dramatic color changes. Nice creative changes.
    -Kayla

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  3. i enjoyed the deliberate pauses at the end of the poem
    -Janna

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  4. I personally liked this poem, but how did you make your words blue at the end?

    -Princess

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  5. I love this poem. It reminds me of my first swim meet.

    -H.

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