i feel so red and feverish, captive yet unimaginably free
a delicious, astonishing, and dreamy burn makes me rise
but an earth-shattering jolt with an unspoken epicenter brings me crashing back, time after time.
i cannot calm this desire, this rough and provocative expression
i am trapped in this obsession, a prisoner beyond happiness and sadness
my love helps me explore the vast confines
sweet and gentle, but striking and energized
through my hungry mind and body.
this romantic and feverish red is coveted long afterwards.
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ReplyDeleteGreat usage of words. I think it would be helpful if you capitalized things that need to be ( Ex. i = I) But other then that great poem
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I don't know what it is, but I REALLY like this poem..
ReplyDeleteI chose to leave out proper grammar (Ex. i=I) as part of the poem. The poem is supposed to represent a natural, unfiltered feeling. By leaving out "proper" grammar, I hoped to leave a raw impact.
ReplyDeleteGreat point, I just think that it may be difficult for the reader to understand that it is the way it is supposed to be instead of wrong grammer
DeleteGood point. Thanks =)
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